CRITIQUE | HOW IS MY DRIVING?

Critique

We all know how this works. I hope. Here is where you can let me know how you think I am managing Kylar, or whatever he goes by these days.

This is like when you spot mustard on someone's face but you don't want to embarrass them so you don't tell them. So EVERYONE ends up seeing that damned mustard spot. You could have spared them a lot of trouble if you just let them know about that mustard, you know? Well, think of my HMD like that. So please don't be shy or worry about my feelings when something seems wrong. You're actually doing me a big favor.

Anyways, if you love him, let me know. If you think something is wrong also let me know. But please if you find something amiss; attach a link so I know the specifics and can get a better feel for where I went awry and how I can improve my characterization for him.

As always, thank you!